Money cannot buy happiness
Money. What is money? Is being able to buy anything in this world means you can buy happiness. Money is happiness? Money is something that helps you to acquire thing that you desire in life including basic necessities. As a matter of fact, you need happiness in life. Although people say that money cannot buy happiness, I believe that money can buy happiness.
I believe that money is everything in this world. True love, friends and health all revolve around money. Many people think so and I think that it is true because it causes one to lose his or her loved one to become rich. Also, it is this thinking that makes us to regret not cherishing anything and only caring about money. Money is everything to us, though it is not something to all people.
There is nothing that money cannot buy. For those who argue that money cannot buy true love, they are not right. Happy life comes with money. You can buy love with money because it shows your status whereby some people are attracted to that status. For example, every girl wants to marry a man with a lot of money so that he can take her to vacation, buy her dress, cars, and live in a good home. Beside, love revolves around money.
Though happiness is priceless you can buy true happiness regardless of the cost. Most billionaires hire girls to entertain them at their homes, massage them and make them feel comfortable. Money can make you awfully comfortable while you are being miserable such as when you are sick. With money you can buy what can make you feel comfortable at that expense. According to Clare Luce, money can make us happy as well as our loved ones. Also, psychological studies indicate that the rich people have less intense negative emotions than poor people. Thus, besides reducing stress, it also makes us happy and feel comfortable without our families.
Though the most happiest people in the world are in Latin America, it does not mean that money cannot buy happiness because they face a lot of health challenges due to their poor living condition. People with health challenges cannot be happier because their body is in pain. Moreover, there is a high rate of crime everyday so as to get daily bread. Thus, happiness incurs a price. In addition, money helps us to buy fake friends and lovers for the time becoming happy.
It is only money that makes us buy materialistic goods that make us happy. It is money that inspires us to work hard to reach our goals. People cannot be successful without getting a purpose in life. Money is the only thing that gives us hope in life. Besides, we go to school so that we get jobs and money to cater for our own lives.
In conclusion, it is extremely true that money can buy us happiness. Without money we are not able to have good friends, love and family. Money motivates us to work hard so as to have the things that we want to live. Thus, I disagree with the statement that money cannot buy happiness.
Dunleavey, M. (2007). Money can buy happiness: How to spend to get the life you want. New York: Broadway Books.
In the set of thesis sentence examples below, there’s one that’s doesn’t actually answer the question. Can you spot it?
SAT essay prompt: Is financial wealth necessary for happiness?
Thesis #1: Anybody who lives in poverty can confirm that without money, we can’t lead the lives we want to.
Thesis #2: While many say that money can’t buy happiness, the truth is far more complicated, and money does in fact play a vital role in our general life satisfaction.
Thesis #3: By looking at cases like lottery winners, celebrities, and business tycoons, it’s pretty clear that money doesn’t always bring the bliss we might expect it to.
Thesis #4: We’d be wise to examine the lives of spiritual figures both historical and mythical, which are often spent in poverty but are clearly fulfilling, regardless.
Analysis: Does it answer the question? Is it relevant?
It’s not easy to find the problem here, so don’t lose confidence if they all look pretty good. Instead, rephrase the question and look again. Can you be happy without money? After that, take out any examples that are introduced to make the thesis a little simpler. Those details are just fine to include in your SAT essay thesis, but when checking relevance, they’re just clutter.
Then, rephrase the sentences to get at their most basic meanings. Here they are again, without the example clutter and using simpler vocabulary and phrasing.
1) Without money, we can’t live how we want to.
2) Money is vital for satisfaction.
3) Sometimes money doesn’t make us happy.
4) Some people have been fulfilled without money.
The problem should be a little bit clearer, now. Thesis 2 is a pretty clear rephrasing of the question, and is just fine. Number 1 uses negatives to make the same argument as thesis 2. Number 4 makes the opposite argument (which is perfectly valid) by providing cases when thesis 2 was not true, so that also answers the question. Thesis number 3, though, doesn’t give a yes or no answer. The question was whether happy people must have money, not if rich people must be happy.
The importance of thesis relevance
The truth is that there are more immediate factors in how your SAT essay gets graded. Since this kind of problem can be pretty subtle, there’s a chance that the essay grader won’t even notice it, at least not at first. But it tends to snowball; an irrelevant thesis leads to irrelevant examples, and suddenly your essay that should be about the importance of money is instead about how Lindsay Lohan is going to die an early death.
And then, even if your vocabulary is polished, your grammar is rock-solid, and you’ve used up the whole front and back of a paper, you’re going to get around an 8 or 10 out of 12 at best.
And if those language skills are lacking as well as the thesis being irrelevant? Well, you can see where that might lead.
Always read the question twice and make sure your answer to it is logical so you don’t get off track.
About Lucas Fink
Lucas is the teacher behind Magoosh TOEFL. He’s been teaching TOEFL preparation and more general English since 2009, and the SAT since 2008. Between his time at Bard College and teaching abroad, he has studied Japanese, Czech, and Korean. None of them come in handy, nowadays.
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